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| Odakira Joined: 9 Jul 2005 Posts: 412 | Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 9:30 pm Name: Darth Tegal
Age: 26 Race: Human Force: Dark Hair: Black, slicked back Eyes: Gold Skin: Pale Height: 6'3'' Weight: 165 lbs. Clothing: Jedi Master's robe (white), black leather gloves, black boots. Technology: Double-Bladed Lightsaber (white blade color), Mirror-plated Galaxy cruiser (see below). History: The history of this character is troubling. Sorrow has plagued his life, thus forming into hatred, which lead to destruction throughout his years at an academy. Rumors say that even though he is mostly conformed into the Dark Side of the Force, his abilities and mind prove neutrality in his thoughts. Mostly traveling alone, and preferring it that way, he can prove a formidable companion, as well as an opponent. Thus, this character can only be figured out through time... Personality: Mostly cruel to anything he does he is not the talkative type. Though he treats some situations with fairness, he leans towards darker ways of handling them. After all, what would you expect from the Dark Side? Ship Name: Black Phoenix Ship Specs= Length: 40 Meters Width: 15 Meters Height: 8 Meters Overall Cargo Capacity: 50 Tons Additonal: 2 Bigger Model Jets on back of body, one smaller jet on top of the body, but in the back. Creates a Triangular Propulsion for well-balanced and safer Hyper Drive Jumps. Body= -Model BDY\\1038-55 T-Shaped Body (Camo. Package) -Mirrored Plating Alloy, Tritanium: 1/2 meter thick solid. Engine= -Model CXL\\0045-02 -+Capabilities -Hyper Drive -Cryobanic Emergency Cooling System -Rechargeable Power Cell; Total Power Containment up to 7,000 Hyper Drive Jumps. -Computer for Droid Link-Up Jets= -Model BST\\6618-23 (2), Model BST\\3099-71 (1) -Self-Installed Power Cells, Capable of running without Engine up to 10 Light Days. -Non-Constant Burn, Pulsation to Reserve Energy and longer traversity of space-distance optional. Weaponry= -Model LSR\\330-67-192 (4), TRT\\4000 (2) -4 mounted laser cannons at the front (two below cockpit, two to the holding slots of the wings). -2 turrets for manual defense (one on top of the ship, the second below). Defense= -Camo. Mirror Plating Model CMO\\555 (used to hide ship in deep space and darkness). -Radar Jamming (Model JR\\083) -Energy Barrier Model SLD\\00347, able to withstand Laser, Light and Heated impacts that runs off the Engine. Runs Constantly off Engine Cell. -Anti-Missile Pods (Model XLS\\3XXX) Other= -Cryogenic Tubes for deep sleep and self preservation. -Medical Bay -Droid Maintenance Bay OOC:Hoo boy, I outdid myself there.... :( Sorry peeps! |
Digithe Joined: 24 Aug 2003 Posts: 884 | Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 10:05 pm i'll try to go in order as i see things:
occupation? I guess this is "wandering sith," but i'm also curious to know how he gets the funds to maintain that ship lightsaber knuckles? sorry, can't do it. First, lightsabers or similar require a power source and a focusing crystal, which is why they have the cylindrical shape of whatever length it is. There's no way to include this, plus the amount of mirrors and crystals required to make the conformingness, and still have it be practical personality? history: This will have to be reviewed by the other dan again, because this is more his server, and he knows the time period better. However, I'm betting that at the present time, there are no sith academies, per se. Actually, there would only be two sith, as decided by Darth Bane after the 7th battle of Ruusan, a master and an apprentice. As for the title business, darth is basically the same as "sith lord." To quote Wikipedia, "Following the Sith Order's destruction at the Seventh Battle of Ruusan, Darth Bane reformed the order and decreed that there would only two Sith at a time from that point onward: a Master and an apprentice. Both would bear the title "Dark Lord of the Sith," which at that point in time became interchangeable with the term "Sith Lord."" (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sith#Sith_Prestige_Classes). Again, this will hafta be discussed with boots. the ship: Seems like a lot of cargo for a small ship, but i'll ignore this for now, unless boots objects engine: is this a separate power cell, or the same one as in the jets? - what is the cryogenic system for? - the engines have a computer of their own? defense: sonar jamming? is your ship amphibious? other: medical bay? is this a full suite, with a droid to tend wounds, etc., or... what? Your ship seems rather small to have a medical bay, esp. in addition to the cargo storage droid maintenance bay? is this ala the thingy from episode 1 with the 6 droids? if you can repost with these questions answered i'd appreciate it ;) |
| Odakira Joined: 9 Jul 2005 Posts: 412 | Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 11:04 pm I fixed the questions and misunderstandings for the occupation/history/personality. As for the ship, 50 tons isn't really that much. Considering it is already holding the engines and what not inside. So I changed the 'Total Cargo Capacity' to 'Overall Cargo Capacity' (my mistake, I thought about it, and didn't think it would be a big deal, but...). I also fixed a mistake, i put cryogenic cooling systems instead of cryobanic (kinda of an icey chemical reaction stuff in the star wars movies and games i.e. what happened to Han Solo in Empire Strikes Back).
As for the jets, they do connect with the power cell. The self installed ones are there for back up (i.e. power cell dies out, or something). The cryobanic system(s): The emergency cooling system is used to freeze the engine and/or powercell for incase the engine overheats or the powercell has some sort of explosive reaction/malfunction. This is the future, so i'm sure i dont need to say whether or not there are sensors that can detect system malfunctions. It would be kinda common sense by then, I'm sure. And the cryo tubes are for sleep. The droid link up in the engines is used for like, status and whatever for the engines. That, and for in case if the computer system to the engines malfunctioned, the droid could override it or whatever. Basically, it's like a plug in, but it has a computer for whatever a droid's purpose is for being linked up (i.e. statistics, temp., blah blah blah). The sonar jamming is removed. Too stressed to piss with that... The Medical bay is small, just simply three beds. And to accomadate the size, I added the width to the ship as well. Since this ship is 24 feet tall, I would imagine it would have two floors to it. But I'm going to still make the medical bay small for reference. Yes, there is a droid that takes care of the medical duties when needed. The droid maintenance bay is quite small. Simply a 10 ft. by 10 ft. room. There only being two droids in the ship (an R2 unit and a medical droid), i could imagine they don't need much space to fix themselves. As for the droids, I didn't want to go into detail about them, I rather just kinda have them there for use later in the story or whatever. and just come up with the names off the top of my head and what not. Hope I answered more questions than creating new ones... |
| Digithe Joined: 24 Aug 2003 Posts: 884 | Posted: Sat Oct 01, 2005 11:37 pm okay... i'm definately more confused with the history now. You took out the part with sith training, but left in his alliance with the dark side of the force and the use of a lightsaber? Also, you took over an entire academy because you killed one teacher? I'm not trying to be bitchy about this, it just isn't fitting together in my head right
Cryobanic? Are you referring to carbonite/carbon freezing? I understand what you're getting at, but carbon freezing was used to ship ore and things, if i remember correctly. You could just put a generic "spiffy thing to cool down engines when they catch on fire," and I suggest this wording mainly because freezing your engine would definately prove problematic. As for using this to sleep... I think this is also a bad idea, because even many many years in the future in episode 5, they didn't use carbon freezing on people; it was an experiment then. Or do you still mean cryogenesis for those tubes? I guess this is fine. Not sure why you would need it, other than for month-long voyages, but... somehow I doubt you'd be doing any, and... wouldn't you need to fly the ship? I still think you don't need a separate computer for the engines, because the computers that work on the front console in the cockpit would already work with that and whatever, but if you really want it then i'm not going to stop you. To me, though, it just seems like one more thing to go wrong That's small? Well okay, if you say so... That's (hopefully) the end of my questions, but we still need confirmation from boots about sith-related things |
| Odakira Joined: 9 Jul 2005 Posts: 412 | Posted: Sun Oct 02, 2005 10:16 am Screw it. I took out the history because it's just getting on my nerves. He's a wandering darkside Jedi. As for his income, he has certain sources and jobs he deals with that pay well, but he mostly uses his persuasion techniques.
Yes, Cryobanic. They are in the games as grenades that can freez people, and within an asteroid base in KOTOR 2 as a cooling system. Why would they put something in a Star Wars game, if you can't use it in a Star Wars themed roleplay, y'know? They freeze people/animals/things whatever, for like a varied amount of time; depending on what you set it for. And with an overheating engine or whatever, I'm sure you'd much rather freeze it then allow it to blow up, ya? And yes, cryogenesis for the tubes, cryobanic for the engines. As for flying the ship, they do have auto-pilot, I mean come on, think about it. We got it today, why not have it in the future? What if circuitry in the front panel got disconnected/malfunctioned/shorted out or whatever to the engines? Then you would need a droid to override them for incase you're about to crashland (let's say) into a planet. You'd need him to slow the engines down to decrease the throttle so you aren't stuff on a rock when you land. |
Asai Joined: 24 Aug 2003 Posts: 638 | Posted: Sun Oct 02, 2005 7:44 pm Dude, you need to chill. Dan doesn't point things out if it doesn't make sense. Just as a matter of fact, my first bio for my first rp was shot down over TWENTY times. Just calm down and think about it.
sith academies have not existed for over 1000 years in this rp. 'Nuff said. More importantly, if you are a sith, you either have a master or and apprentice. It must be this way, because of what can be called the law of the sith. Wandering jedi are rare enough, but one lone sith just wouldn't be. Sorry. I really think the ship's alright, but u can't really autopilot in hyperspace. Just trust me on this one, it doesn't work. Other than that, the cryobanic thing is your decision, but i personally would choose a less powerful coolant. |
| Odakira Joined: 9 Jul 2005 Posts: 412 | Posted: Sun Oct 02, 2005 8:21 pm I never said it autopilots in hyperspace x_x; i know that has to be done manually during hyper-space jumps. Dan never mentioned auto-piloted hyper-space jumps anyway. I only said the auto pilot would be used for long travels, not that it was for hyperspace.
As for the sith deal, I said I dropped it in my last post. He's a wandering Dark Jedi. He works on his own. He's on the Dark Side of the Force. You don't have to be Sith to be evil. I already dropped the sith dealio. As for cryoban, i'll stick with it. And sorry if I may be acting a little stressed and hot-headed at the moment, but i have things going on that are just not going good around the home lately. Sorry for my temper and everything. |
| Digithe Joined: 24 Aug 2003 Posts: 884 | Posted: Sun Oct 02, 2005 8:45 pm I think boots was referring to your cryogenics. The only thing i could think of them to be used for would be so you can sleep on a long journey, but you'd be going hyperspace and you can't have an autopilot for that. That's what I was meaning, and I think that's what boots was talkin' about. Anyway, since he's fine with the ship i'll let it be.
So are you saying you were trained at the jedi academy, then left and fell pray to the darkside? I guess that's fine; he's certainly old enough. Hope your things at home cool off. Things always work themselves out, just give it time. *patpat* My last nit-pickyness is that your saying him showing neutrality is slightly confusing. Do you refer to his force alignment, or his social alignment (eg: good/bad, so to speak)? If you meant force alignment, that would be a shadow jedi, which is what my character is/will be. To be a shadow jedi, you must first have the idea that there could be balance between the two forces, which seems unlikely in your character, given his chaotic history which seems to lend to the dark side. Second, you must meditate deeply to achieve said balance. If you mean neutral societally (is this a word? O_o;) then that's okay, but it should probably be "chaotic neutral," as it would be in D&D. This is simply because the dark side craves destruction and anger, and as such to be a dark jedi you would have to beat up people and so on. Of course, chaotic neutral would mean you beat people up indiscriminantly or are generally "law abiding" unless you need something. Or... something like that that o_O; Just clear this up and we should be done ;) |
| Odakira Joined: 9 Jul 2005 Posts: 412 | Posted: Sun Oct 02, 2005 9:04 pm Thanks Dan. Hopefully things will work out here shortly (or I get over what all is happening).
Yea, by neutrality I mean by social means. Like, now and then he'll consider things he usually doesn't consider, but they don't affect his alignment. For future reference, I'll let you know I'm quite familiar with alignments and such in D&D (me happening to be the grandson of a former D&D company president). So, don't feel like you need to explain something like that. I'm not being like "Rawr" about it, just letting you all know. :P Hope everything is fixed now. :) |
| Eshe Joined: 14 Nov 2003 Posts: 485 | Posted: Mon Oct 03, 2005 5:21 am I approve because I'm cool.
No just kidding. Everything seems to be in order now, so I'll give my approval on this character. ~ The Administration |
| Odakira Joined: 9 Jul 2005 Posts: 412 | Posted: Tue Oct 24, 2006 3:34 pm Here's Tegal's new look:
[img:2abecabe53]http://i14.tinypic.com/4crpvs5.jpg[/img:2abecabe53] As for his uniform, just imagine a mix between Darth Revan and Nihilus from the KOTOR games. Instead of flowy robes around the legs and torso of Tegal, the usual black jedi uniform is worn (like that of Darth Maul's). |
The Ace of Spades Joined: 7 May 2006 Posts: 398 | Posted: Tue Oct 24, 2006 5:02 pm The uniform "is accompanied"?
... 0_o |
| Odakira Joined: 9 Jul 2005 Posts: 412 | Posted: Tue Oct 24, 2006 5:23 pm To accompany is to supplement, and to supplement is to complete. I was using it in meaning to complete Tegal's uniform as it was briefly described above before I fixed it. |
| The Ace of Spades Joined: 7 May 2006 Posts: 398 | Posted: Tue Oct 24, 2006 9:06 pm I know what accompany means. The incorrect usage had me muddled. ("is accompanied" is usually followed with "by... a rubber duck, a greeting card, a Sith uniform, etc..." If you wanted to use it without anything to follow it, it should be "the Sith uniform accompanies..." rather than "...is accompanied." Or, you could have said, "this outfit is accompanied by Darth Maul's uniform," or whatever. But leaving it at "is accompanied" is just confusing. Makes us wonder what's accompanying it.) |
| Odakira Joined: 9 Jul 2005 Posts: 412 | Posted: Wed Oct 25, 2006 3:11 am In the sentence (before I fixed it) I used his legs as the subject to which the uniform accompanied. I was saying that the clothing he wore was kinda like Revan's and Nihilus, except there were no flowy robes around the legs because the two subjects I mentioned pretty much covered the description of Tegal's new look, minus the uniform. I can't remember what exactly I said word for word because it's 3:00 AM in the morning and I've been working on my broke-down car all day, but it was something to the likeness of that. And sorry if it sounds like I'm gettin' mad at you, believe me, I'm not. The last thing I wanna do is piss everyone off..... again :P |
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