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| Odakira Joined: 9 Jul 2005 Posts: 412 | Posted: Mon Jun 12, 2006 1:40 am Name: Jack D. Walters
Age: 27 Occupation: Private Detective (Solo) Equipment: Two six-shot revolvers holstered at his mid-back Description: Jack Walters isn't your average "run-of-the-mill" detective, though he looks it. The shadow on his face, hazy blue eyes that are slightly darkened around the lids from lack of sleep, and a short cut messy hair-do of brown accompanied along. With somewhat a slumpish stance, Jack's skin is as pale as a ghost. Though none have seen his arms, they are covered in various scars from a troubled past. When Jack is caught in a nostalgic moment of his past, his expressions can clearly show that he is lost. Dressed in the usual "detective attire", Jack wears a white button-up shirt, loosely met at the collar with a black tie, along with a brown vest. A pair of slacks and a trench coat that match the vest follow with black shoes, and occasionally a brown cap. It's often you'll find a lit cigarette wedged in his mouth. Personality: Brutally honest and straight-to-business. Mr. Walters isn't all to open about himself when he is on a case. Though lately, paranoia has caused his senses to become slightly 'scrambled', and he may not be all too keen about staying on a commotion's topic. He barely hangs onto his sanity, for his past scarred his mind severely. History: Madness. Madness was all that plagued young Jack's mind. Day after day. Night after night. Waking up to see the very same padded ceiling everytime. Nothing to do but lay still, write an entry in his journal for the day, then enjoy a chat with Dr. Herdstrom, only to return to bed and stare at the ceiling. Or at least that's what he remembered for a month after Jack had attempted hanging himself... It was a rainy night when Jack received a call to investigate an old barnhouse just outside of Springfield. Upon his arrival, police had already secured the area, but had not made any arrests. It was obvious gunfire had been present, for the smell of gunpowder was still crisp in the air. When questioning the cops, they made no effort to respond whatsoever. They just gave a stern stare, and gestured for him to enter. Entering the shabby barnhouse, a tall man who's bare chest was adorned with many a tattoo met him. This man gave one of them scary and disturbing grins that no person would like to be greeted with. His head was skinned and piercing white eyes were placed in his sockets. He didn't catch much of his appearance before something struck him in the head, and knocked him out. When Jack awoke, his body smelt of stench, almost as if he hadn't bathed in a few weeks. Well... It was actually because he didn't. Jack woke to find a bloody knife in his hand and a girl, roughly around 10 years old, stabbed multiple times. Dead on the ground. It wasn't long after till cops began to show, and took Jack away. It was a set-up. It had to be. Having to deal with either the fact that he killed the young girl known to be named as Ramona, or that something took control of him, Jack slowly fell into a mental craze. The insanity that overcame him got him transported from Springfield Hold to Arkham Asylum. When he was checked in, he was interrogated by cops and feds, but it was no use. Jack was continuously haunted by Ramona, and no sense could come from him. It was six years in the Asylum's hold before Jack came out of his craze. Having scratched strange 'letters' into his arms with his fingernails one night, bloody letters of the same style were written into his journal as well (using his fingers to write them onto the paper). Ramona continued to haunt him to the point of madness of where he attempted suicide that night, but one of the workers managed to save him. Possibly the jerk of the rope around his neck broke him free of his insanity. It was almost as if he had suffered a severe case of amnesia, and he couldn't remember anything that happened before the case at the Springfield Barnhouse. About 6 months after his 'awakening', Jack was released from the Asylum, and back on duty. The Feds, beforehand, questioned him again about the situation, and still couldn't gain an answer as to what happened between him and Ramona. Jack was to be given the death-sentence, but a letter from a superior was sent to the officials who were to set up the execution, granting him back his freedom. But something still made him confused... What drove him to such madness, the strange letters he wrote in his journal and scratched into himself, and the small brunette girl that kept coming into his visions. Plus the fact that he was released for something he was to be killed for. Someone was playing with Jack's mind, pushing him here to there, making his life hell. Nothing fit into place. Moving to the Chicago area, Jack still lives his life as a private detective, but hopes that one case may lead him to find the answer about his missing past. Not to mention how careful he must be. If he were to be brought in again for a crime, he could face life in Arkham, or death by firing-squad. Till then, he takes on odd jobs and small cases to kill the time... OOC:Questions? Comments? |
Digithe Joined: 24 Aug 2003 Posts: 884 | Posted: Wed Jun 21, 2006 1:14 pm Personality's a bit vague, but I guess most of it is really described in the history... Also, the last sentance in the desc. is extremely confused. I *think* you meant "He barely hangs onto his sanity, for his past scarred his mind severely." Please use a dictionary >_>;
As for the history, you don't necessarily have to write this into the history itself, but can you tell me how he got smacked on the back of the head when the police "had already secured the area"? That seems like a fairly large plothole right there.... Also, was the strange man he saw tied up or was he free? It's kind of obscure, and, again, it doesn't make sense if he was free since the police "had already secured the area." I also have to wonder how he got hold of a pen if he was in the loony bin. (Arkham Asylum... -_-; ) Last, I have to wonder why he was allowed back on duty if he was supposed to be in prison for murder and was instead put into an asylum (which still is questionable, based on the time period. I'm fairly certain they didn't care too much about sanity of murderers back then, but I'll ignroe it and give you the benefit of the doubt). That's it, besides a few little things that I'll ignore. This is interesting character, there are just a few too many plot-holes in his history for me to approve him in just yet. |
| Odakira Joined: 9 Jul 2005 Posts: 412 | Posted: Wed Jun 21, 2006 1:39 pm No problem, I'll try to clear up what I can.
About him being knocked out at the Barnhouse, I put in the history that the area had been secured by the police, yet no arrests were made. The police didn't make any arrests because they were part of the scheme. And the tattoo-man was basically the head honcho of the ordeal. It was all to lure Jack into a trap basically. The reason for this is because the brother of the tattoo-man's brother was caught by Jack, and executed for several counts of murder and that Jack had trailed him for nearly a year until he got him. Basically 'Head-Honcho' was looking for revenge, and gave it to Jack in the forms of guilt (for killing the girl), madness, and confusion. Basically giving him a longer period of mental pain and torture rather than death. I didn't want to put this into the History so it would kinda play later into the roleplay, but if you want me to, I could add it in. As for the pen and writing in his journal in the Asylum, it was during his lunch break he was able to do this when a doctor or nurse was watching him. He was more of a 'tweeky' person than he was a um... 'I'm going to kill myself as soon as I get the chance' kind of person. :P It took a while for the idea to kill himself to settle in. As for being back on duty, Jack was a solo private detective. Like a Freelancer. His whole skit of being nutty and in the asylum was kind of like a phase until his attempted suicide. Like I put in there, the jerk of the rope is what brought him back (like a lip-lash effect). I did put in there that he was transferred from the Springfield Hold (a prison) to the Asylum from his mentality issues. He was in a prison, but just not for too long :P Hope this clears up any questions ^__^ I'm also going to fix that last sentence in the desc. for ya |
| Digithe Joined: 24 Aug 2003 Posts: 884 | Posted: Wed Jun 21, 2006 7:44 pm I figured it had something to do with crooked cops; doesn't explain why he went along with it but that's okay -- he's your character and if you feel that he would walk into that trap, that's your decision.
[quote:8d0b576d4a]As for the pen and writing in his journal in the Asylum, it was during his lunch break he was able to do this when a doctor or nurse was watching him. He was more of a 'tweeky' person than he was a um... 'I'm going to kill myself as soon as I get the chance' kind of person. tongue It took a while for the idea to kill himself to settle in. [/quote:8d0b576d4a] This still doesn't explain why he was allowed to carve into his arm, which I think would be enough to put him on suicide watch. [quote:8d0b576d4a]As for being back on duty, Jack was a solo private detective. Like a Freelancer.[/quote:8d0b576d4a] This still doesn't explain why he wasn't sent back to jail to complete his prison sentance (nor does it explain why he got prison instead of the death sentance for murder. Remember, this is the 1920s, and the girl was apparently quite brutally murdered) [quote:8d0b576d4a]He was in a prison, but just not for too long :P[/quote:8d0b576d4a] Like I said in the last paragraph, it doesn't make a whole lot of sense that he wouldn't be given life in prison, if given a prison sentance at all. Even if he was transferred to the asylum (which probably would have been to keep him from hurting himself) it doesn't make sense to me that they wouldn't send him right back to prison after he got better. [quote:8d0b576d4a]I'm also going to fix that last sentence in the desc. for ya[/quote:8d0b576d4a] Thank you ^_^ |
| Odakira Joined: 9 Jul 2005 Posts: 412 | Posted: Wed Jun 21, 2006 10:33 pm [quote:4d081038e3]This still doesn't explain why he was allowed to carve into his arm, which I think would be enough to put him on suicide watch.[/quote:4d081038e3]
Fixed it :P [quote:4d081038e3]This still doesn't explain why he wasn't sent back to jail to complete his prison sentance (nor does it explain why he got prison instead of the death sentance for murder. Remember, this is the 1920s, and the girl was apparently quite brutally murdered)[/quote:4d081038e3] fixed that too [quote:4d081038e3]Like I said in the last paragraph, it doesn't make a whole lot of sense that he wouldn't be given life in prison, if given a prison sentance at all. Even if he was transferred to the asylum (which probably would have been to keep him from hurting himself) it doesn't make sense to me that they wouldn't send him right back to prison after he got better.[/quote:4d081038e3] fixed :) if it brings up more questions, let me know ^__^ |
| Digithe Joined: 24 Aug 2003 Posts: 884 | Posted: Thu Jun 22, 2006 10:26 am [quote:cff10d2f0a]Jack was to be given the death-sentence, but a letter from a superior was sent to the officials who were to set up the execution, granting him back his freedom. [/quote:cff10d2f0a]
You're saying he got a pardon from the governor/president? Yes I know there were a few crooked cops back then, but I don't imagine they were crooked enough to expunge a murderer's record and let them go free -- especially a private detective with no real mob connections, except that they hate him. Also, this I'm just curious about, but... where'd he get the rope to hang himself? |
Melia Stahlflugel Joined: 4 Aug 2005 Posts: 613 | Posted: Thu Jun 22, 2006 10:34 am He made it out of his body hair, silly. D:
OOC:JUST LIKE JACK SPARROW HOMG xD |
| Odakira Joined: 9 Jul 2005 Posts: 412 | Posted: Thu Jun 22, 2006 11:23 am lol, nice one Melia! XD
He used his bedsheets :P Y'know, like how every kid ties it to their bed post and climbs out a window? About the superior who released him. The tattoo-man was wanting to bring some pain into Jack's life, so he was wanting to have him killed with an execution. But since Jack went nutty, he ended up being placed in Arkham, which the tat-man wasn't expecting to happen. When tat-man gained word of this, he thought it would be better for Jack to suffer this way. Then the day came where Jack came back to his senses after trying to hang himself. The tat-man was in charge of the interrogations and the questionings, and when results came back to him, he thought it would be nice to release him but get him again in the future to do the same thing. The thing is he needs time. The tat-man is the commissioner of the Springfield Hold, but the cops under him are just misled. If he were to do the same thing so soon, the cops would definitely know who Jack was again, and then the plot would be exposed. Basically, the commissioner/tat-man is behind his release. Like putting salt into an open cut :P |
| Digithe Joined: 24 Aug 2003 Posts: 884 | Posted: Sat Jun 24, 2006 11:17 am Still seems iffy to me, but plausible enough, and you did fix all the major problems I had with it.
Unless someone else has a major problem with it, I approve - The Administration |
| Odakira Joined: 9 Jul 2005 Posts: 412 | Posted: Sat Jun 24, 2006 11:59 am Yeah, I see where you're coming from Digithe. The story behind this character is not so clearly defined from where I got a majority of his background from, so I basically just tried to fill the gaps as best I could. :P Thanks though! :) |
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